题目
Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists and not local people. Why is this case? What can be done to attract local people?
第一次写
Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists and not local people. Why is this case? What can be done to attract local people?
词组准备：
Tourist/ traveler/ farer/ visitor/ sightseer/ excursionist指远足/徒步旅行者（例如周末去郊区爬个山）
from hundreds of miles
The local/ native/ indigene
Within the walking distance
Museum: Heritage properties and antique exhibition
Lose the motivation/passion
句式准备：
The essay aims to explore the underlying reasons and come up with effective solutions to this issue.
It is high time that constructive measures should be taken to prevent the situation from getting worse.
In conclusion, due to the threat to xxx, the problems of community must be addressed, which needs the joint efforts of both individuals and communities.
原因：
are more familiar with their surroundings
have limited time such as weekends这个原因不太合适
措施：
a discount on entry tickets by providing local identity cards
local governments should take it as their responsibility to introduce their citizens to these interesting places.
正文：
It is There is a lamentable fact that heritage properties and antique exhibitions in local museums only attracted travelers from hundreds of miles instead of natives within the walking distance. The essay aims to explore the underlying reasons and come up with effective solutions to this issue.
背景介绍写得很不错
The reasons behind this phenomenon are multiple. First and the foremost, the locals are more familiar with their surroundings and believe the chances to visit local historical sites are plentiful ,so that they used to lose the motivation to visit those places immediately. On the contrary, farers come to a remote place with the aim to learn about different cultures and some specific history, which leads to their strong passion. Apart from this, indigenes have limited time such as weekends, which they would rather watch movies at home or go shopping than visit a local museum. Unlike local individuals, sightseers often prepare a long period time to go travelling.
indigenes have limited time such as weekends,这个理由不太合适
It is high time that constructive measures should be taken to prevent the situation from getting worse. The first solution is that museums and historical sites could give a discount on entry tickets, if visitors can provide a local identity card. As a result, local people are more likely to pay a visit there. In addition, the local governments are supposed to take it as their responsibility to introduce their citizens to those interesting places. For example, the officials could make some videos related to the history stories behind the historical sites in order to stimulate the interests of natives.
take it as their responsibility to introduce 可以换为 take the responsibility for introducing
, if visitors can provide a local identity card, 可以换为 to visitors with local identity card
In conclusion, although sightseers often have a stronger motivation to visit museums and historical sites, however, natives should learn from them with the help of effective measures from governments which I mentioned above.
should 可以换成也能够 are also able to
第二次写，针对修改第二个理由
As the entrance fee of museums and historical sites as well as related hospitality income account for/contribute to the most of local tourism revenue, governments tend to strengthen the sightseeing publicity to visitors. In that case, the museums and historical sites are likely to become overly commercialized and there will be less local visitors.
