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【每日英语】改善choppy sentence

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2018.10.29 11:04* 字数 183

改善choppy sentence(太多短句)

例子:

原文:
My family left our homeland. Then we lived in a refugee camp. Then we got our documents. Then we traveled to Canada. And we live there now.
可以看出,原文有很多短句,很零碎,不适合作为书面用语。

改善后:
After my family left our homeland, we lived in a refugee camp for several months. As soon as we got our documents, we traveled to Canada, where we live now.

改善步骤

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练习:

We must find new sources of energy. Natural sources of energy are decreasing. Solar energy is a promising new source of energy. Solar energy is energy from the sun.

答案:
We must find new sources of energy because natural sources of energy are dwindling. Solar energy, which is energy from the sun, is a promising new source.

参考资料:

  1. Alice Oshima, Ann Hogue. Writing Academic English (4th ed.). 2006.
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